posted by Cuddly Family @ 9:08 AM
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TITLE: SURPRISE PACKAGE
Panel 1- (large) Mid morning-Panoramic view of a nice middle class neighbourhood, the white picket fence variety. You can see kids bikes strewn on the grass, a basketball or baseball on the front yards here and there. Mums walking along the tree lined pavement with kids in strollers or walking beside them, waving to each other across the street. Very peaceful suburbia look.
Panel 2- We now come to a two storey white house with green wooden shutters and front door (with open windows, billowing pale curtains) and a front porch, cane rocking chairs, and a cane table near the front door and a red swing hangs from the branches of a large tree (to our left of the front porch). A kid’s bike is leaning against the steps of the porch.
VOICE (OP)- GRANDPOPS…. GRANDPOPS….. WHERE ARE YOU?
Panel 3- Zooming in on a young boy (8 years old, blond, blue eyes) running through a narrow passageway with wooden floors and the closing front door behind him. The sun light is mottled across the floor and the boy’s excited face.
BOY- GRANDPOPS!!!
Panel 4 (small)- We see the boy’s arms and legs disappearing around the corner of the stairway..
VOICE (OP)- UPSTAIRS, BILLY MY LAD..
Page 2
Panel 1- Billy is now puffing and panting just inside an open door of a room with a grin on his face.
BILLY- I GOT IT, GRANDPOPS! CAN WE OPEN IT YET? HUH? HUH?
Panel 2 (small)- Over the shoulder shot of a old man with a shock of white hair dressed in a warm sweater, shoulders hunched slightly. He’s sitting in a cane rocker by wide open french window doors opening out onto a balcony (that’s slightly to our left). In front of him we can just make out the eager Billy.
GRANDPOPS- NOT YET, SON. COME SIT HERE A WHILE.
Panel 3- Billy is sitting on the floor, looking affectionately up at his grandfather (whose face is still hidden in half shadows, you can see he’s an old man but nothing distinctive). A brown paper flat package is on the floor next to him. Billy’s hand is on the package, almost lovingly.
BILLY- I’VE BEEN WAITING AGES FOR THIS, GRANDPOPS. I REALLY WANNA OPEN IT!
GRANDPOPS- BEFORE WE DO THAT, I HAVE A SURPRISE FOR YOU.
Panel 4- Behind Billy, we see the bedroom door opening, a boot is stepping through the gap. Billy is looking confused.
BILLY- FOR ME?!
GRANDPOPS- YES, BILLY…
Panel 5- Close up of Billy’s face, he’s looking both surprised and really excited…
GRANDPOPS- LOOK BEHIND YOU…
Page 3
Panel 1- We see Billy obediently turning around to see who is at the door (we see a figure in shadow, just making out a pair of boots…
BILLY-….. OH!!!!!
Panel 2- Billy is now leaping into the arms of a military uniform-clad man with short cropped blond hair and a strong resemblence to Billy.
BILLY- DADDYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU’RE BACK!!!!!!!
Panel 3 (large)- The three generations are sitting together now, Billy is again on the floor, leaning against his father’s knee. His father is sitting in an easy chair, smiling down at him. Grandpops is still in the rocking chair, beaming at the surprise and delight he’s given Billy. We can see the package on his lap.
Page 4
Panel 1- Billy has turned to Grandpops, pointing eagerly at the package on his lap.
BILLY- GRANDPOPS, DADDY IS HERE NOW…. CAN WE OPEN THAT PLEASE? PLEASE GRANDPOPS!
Panel 2- Grandpops is handing the package to Billy’s father with a smile.
GRANDPOPS- GO AHEAD, DAN… IT’S BEEN A LONG TIME COMING FOR US ALL..
Panel 3- Dan is cutting the string away from the package carefully, eagerly watched by Billy. Grandpops has a proud look on his face.
DAN- ALMOST…..THERE…
Panel 4 (MEDIUM)- The three males are looking at the package whose wrapper is starting to fall away, we can see the corner of what looks like a book, Dan is holding it, about to lift it up from its packaging.
DAN- HERE IT IS..
BILLY- SHOW ME, DADDY! SHOW ME!!
Page 5
Panel 1- (Splash) A hand is holding up a comic book, pristine in its clear wrapper. On the front is a World war 2 scene with army men lying on the ground or running towards the forested area, thick snow on the ground. It looks like a fierce battle. The words on the cover should read: Proletariat Comics presents “WC6- The Saga continues..”
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