Tuesday, September 13, 2005

This was written for PJ's writing contest 5 (WC5).

http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?t=61291

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TITLE: Mr. Cuddly makes a decision.

Page 1

Panel 1- A very large man with a tiny head fast asleep (dressed in vividly striped pyjamas pants and a white collarless t-shirt) on his side (back to us) on a large bed against the wall in a tiny bedroom. There’s a suitcase on the threadbare carpet floor. The window is open and the curtains are fluttering in the breeze, sunlight is beginning to stream through.

Panel 2- Large Man (Mr. Cuddly) has now opened his eyes, stretching awake. You can see his T-shirt with the writing: ‘My name is Mr. Cuddly’ in faded red big letters.


Panel 3- Mr. Cuddly tried to get up from bed and bumps his head on the ceiling.

SFX- OMMMPPHHH…

Panel 4- Rubbing his head, Mr. C is now in a tiny kitchenette overlooking a dingy living/dining area, making his bacon and eggs.

Panel 5- Close up of a large hand scraping the blackened eggs and bacon in the pan into a rubbish bin (or trash can).

Page 2

Panel 1- Mr C is nursing a huge cup of steaming hot coffee over the want ads in the paper. The “Recruitment Classifieds” should feature prominently as a headline. Some of the want ads are circled in red.

Panel 2- Split panel of Mr C on the phone talking to a female secretary (in the other panel). Mr C’s face should look despondent while the secretary looks bored.


Panel 3- Mr C is crossing off another want ad in those papers with a big red pen, making an X marking.

Panel 4- Mr C now dressed in a suit and an tall hat, holding the want ads/newspaper in his hand, locking his appartment door. His face is dotted as if he’s cut himself shaving.

Page 3

Panel 1- Mr C is carefully counting out the money to pay the bored looking clerk behind the ticket counter in a subway station. Behind him, irritated travellers impatiently look on.

Panel 2- Mr C is now sitting in a subway car (empty carriage), hunched over, looking sad and depressed. Opposite him, a cute and angelic looking little girl with pig tails and a summer dress eyeing him thoughtfully. She has a cute clutch bag on her lap and a travel bag under her feet.


Panel 3- Mr C is reading his newspaper. We should be able to see the headlines “SHOCKING ROBBERY ON TRAIN BY SEVEN YEAR OLD GIRL.” clearly visible.

Panel 4 (large)- Mr C has lowered his newspaper and looking in surprise at the cute little girl now pointing a big gun at him and her hand is out.

Page 4

Panel 1- Mr C has turned out his suit pockets and the girl is inspecting his outstretched hands with disbelief. Should only contain the key to appartment and small change and a sweet or two.

Panel 2- The Girl is popping the sweet into her mouth while the other hand is waving the gun at Mr. C who just looks resigned to his fate.


Panel 3- the Girl is sucking on the sweet while eyeing the sad Mr. C. She’s looking thoughtful, calculative.

Panel 4- The Girl is now talking animatedly to Mr C (the gun is still being waved about rather cavalierly) who now looks interested.

Panel 5- The Girl is walking away, putting the gun in her clutch bag. with Mr C behind her, he’s carrying a large travel bag, the zip should be slightly open and some dollar bills should be peeking out.

Page 5

Panel 1- Mr. C (in suit and tall hat), he’s looking happy, eating his breakfast at the tiny dining table. The morning newspaper is on the side, unopened.

Panel 2- Close-up of the newspaper. Headlines in bold should read: “Robber girl Still Terrorising Subway.”


Panel 3 (large)- The Girl is now pointing her gun at a rich corporate type sitting on the subway, he’s emptying his pocket contents into the travel bag held open by Mr. Cuddly.

- FIN-




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