Lia's Creative Corner

2006-05-28T19:09:00.000-07:00

From now on: the blogs will be at wordpress: Check out our new Cuddlyfamily Blog!

In memory of..

2006-05-02T23:45:00.000-07:00

Our buddy Sree's dad MGG Pillai (see http://www.mggpillai.com) passed away suddenly last friday and this poem was written in memory of this larger than life man. I didnt know him as well as Don but he was a kind, earnest and articulate man. Our love and sympathies go out to his family..

To MGG Pillai

His legacy is not one of wealth and jewels but of something far richer

He was a man with integrity and an uncompromising attitude

that brought the admiration of all.

He was a loving husband and father

One who tried to install the same strength of character

That was the very essence of his character.

He was a respected journalist

A man who firmly believed in the truth and a fair society

A man of principle and a rare breed in today’s society.

It was a great loss to us all at his passing.

Our hearts go out to his family

A man of great heart,

This was just one side of MGG Pillai,

A true son of Malaysia.

Angelia Ong

On the occasion of MGG Pillai’s passing

April 29^th 2006.

2005-11-16T00:12:00.000-08:00

Going through some creative blues at the moment..

although the digital colouring is going nicely, just worked on one with Frank (Rocket37). Can't publish that yet.. need it for ASJ :)

more news on that later.

lia etc

2005-10-20T09:08:00.000-07:00

what's next? It's time I started seriously writing my web comic script, otherwise poor Frank, Don, Jorge will be left dangling... mucho hurry da up methinks..

Digital colouring has to take a back seat for a while, it's been an interesting learning experience, I really wanna give it a go but I think I've got to pound out these scripts first cos there's edits, re-workings, character descriptions, never-ending mah... let alone planning schedule, timelines, getting it out there, promotions...habis leh...

oh well, onwards and hopefully upwards!

2005-10-20T08:45:00.000-07:00

Latest attempt at digital colouring,...

and here's my entry for the latest writing contest on PJ (WC6), run by Dannoe...

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TITLE: SURPRISE PACKAGE

Page 1

Panel 1- (large) Mid morning-Panoramic view of a nice middle class neighbourhood, the white picket fence variety. You can see kids bikes strewn on the grass, a basketball or baseball on the front yards here and there. Mums walking along the tree lined pavement with kids in strollers or walking beside them, waving to each other across the street. Very peaceful suburbia look.

Panel 2- We now come to a two storey white house with green wooden shutters and front door (with open windows, billowing pale curtains) and a front porch, cane rocking chairs, and a cane table near the front door and a red swing hangs from the branches of a large tree (to our left of the front porch). A kid’s bike is leaning against the steps of the porch.

VOICE (OP)- GRANDPOPS…. GRANDPOPS….. WHERE ARE YOU?

Panel 3- Zooming in on a young boy (8 years old, blond, blue eyes) running through a narrow passageway with wooden floors and the closing front door behind him. The sun light is mottled across the floor and the boy’s excited face.

BOY- GRANDPOPS!!!

Panel 4 (small)- We see the boy’s arms and legs disappearing around the corner of the stairway..

VOICE (OP)- UPSTAIRS, BILLY MY LAD..

Page 2

Panel 1- Billy is now puffing and panting just inside an open door of a room with a grin on his face.

BILLY- I GOT IT, GRANDPOPS! CAN WE OPEN IT YET? HUH? HUH?

Panel 2 (small)- Over the shoulder shot of a old man with a shock of white hair dressed in a warm sweater, shoulders hunched slightly. He’s sitting in a cane rocker by wide open french window doors opening out onto a balcony (that’s slightly to our left). In front of him we can just make out the eager Billy.

GRANDPOPS- NOT YET, SON. COME SIT HERE A WHILE.

Panel 3- Billy is sitting on the floor, looking affectionately up at his grandfather (whose face is still hidden in half shadows, you can see he’s an old man but nothing distinctive). A brown paper flat package is on the floor next to him. Billy’s hand is on the package, almost lovingly.

BILLY- I’VE BEEN WAITING AGES FOR THIS, GRANDPOPS. I REALLY WANNA OPEN IT!

GRANDPOPS- BEFORE WE DO THAT, I HAVE A SURPRISE FOR YOU.

Panel 4- Behind Billy, we see the bedroom door opening, a boot is stepping through the gap. Billy is looking confused.

BILLY- FOR ME?!

GRANDPOPS- YES, BILLY…

Panel 5- Close up of Billy’s face, he’s looking both surprised and really excited…

GRANDPOPS- LOOK BEHIND YOU…

Page 3

Panel 1- We see Billy obediently turning around to see who is at the door (we see a figure in shadow, just making out a pair of boots…

BILLY-….. OH!!!!!

Panel 2- Billy is now leaping into the arms of a military uniform-clad man with short cropped blond hair and a strong resemblence to Billy.

BILLY- DADDYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU’RE BACK!!!!!!!

Panel 3 (large)- The three generations are sitting together now, Billy is again on the floor, leaning against his father’s knee. His father is sitting in an easy chair, smiling down at him. Grandpops is still in the rocking chair, beaming at the surprise and delight he’s given Billy. We can see the package on his lap.

Page 4

Panel 1- Billy has turned to Grandpops, pointing eagerly at the package on his lap.

BILLY- GRANDPOPS, DADDY IS HERE NOW…. CAN WE OPEN THAT PLEASE? PLEASE GRANDPOPS!

Panel 2- Grandpops is handing the package to Billy’s father with a smile.

GRANDPOPS- GO AHEAD, DAN… IT’S BEEN A LONG TIME COMING FOR US ALL..

Panel 3- Dan is cutting the string away from the package carefully, eagerly watched by Billy. Grandpops has a proud look on his face.

DAN- ALMOST…..THERE…

Panel 4 (MEDIUM)- The three males are looking at the package whose wrapper is starting to fall away, we can see the corner of what looks like a book, Dan is holding it, about to lift it up from its packaging.

DAN- HERE IT IS..

BILLY- SHOW ME, DADDY! SHOW ME!!

Page 5

Panel 1- (Splash) A hand is holding up a comic book, pristine in its clear wrapper. On the front is a World war 2 scene with army men lying on the ground or running towards the forested area, thick snow on the ground. It looks like a fierce battle. The words on the cover should read: Proletariat Comics presents “WC6- The Saga continues..”

2005-10-16T08:55:00.000-07:00

My first attempt at digital colouring haha

2005-10-13T19:13:00.000-07:00

http://www.nanowrimo.org/modules/cjaycontent/index.php?id=29

don and Jenn think I shld give it a go.. but Im not sure I hv the time or inclination, I've got other writing plans brewing haha... I may not... sigh.. since it's got to be a whole new piece haha..

laters
lia etc

2005-09-13T06:33:00.000-07:00

This was written for PJ's writing contest 5 (WC5).

http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?t=61291

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TITLE: Mr. Cuddly makes a decision.

Page 1

Panel 1- A very large man with a tiny head fast asleep (dressed in vividly striped pyjamas pants and a white collarless t-shirt) on his side (back to us) on a large bed against the wall in a tiny bedroom. There’s a suitcase on the threadbare carpet floor. The window is open and the curtains are fluttering in the breeze, sunlight is beginning to stream through.

Panel 2- Large Man (Mr. Cuddly) has now opened his eyes, stretching awake. You can see his T-shirt with the writing: ‘My name is Mr. Cuddly’ in faded red big letters.

Panel 3- Mr. Cuddly tried to get up from bed and bumps his head on the ceiling.

SFX- OMMMPPHHH…

Panel 4- Rubbing his head, Mr. C is now in a tiny kitchenette overlooking a dingy living/dining area, making his bacon and eggs.

Panel 5- Close up of a large hand scraping the blackened eggs and bacon in the pan into a rubbish bin (or trash can).

Page 2

Panel 1- Mr C is nursing a huge cup of steaming hot coffee over the want ads in the paper. The “Recruitment Classifieds” should feature prominently as a headline. Some of the want ads are circled in red.

Panel 2- Split panel of Mr C on the phone talking to a female secretary (in the other panel). Mr C’s face should look despondent while the secretary looks bored.

Panel 3- Mr C is crossing off another want ad in those papers with a big red pen, making an X marking.

Panel 4- Mr C now dressed in a suit and an tall hat, holding the want ads/newspaper in his hand, locking his appartment door. His face is dotted as if he’s cut himself shaving.

Page 3

Panel 1- Mr C is carefully counting out the money to pay the bored looking clerk behind the ticket counter in a subway station. Behind him, irritated travellers impatiently look on.

Panel 2- Mr C is now sitting in a subway car (empty carriage), hunched over, looking sad and depressed. Opposite him, a cute and angelic looking little girl with pig tails and a summer dress eyeing him thoughtfully. She has a cute clutch bag on her lap and a travel bag under her feet.

Panel 3- Mr C is reading his newspaper. We should be able to see the headlines “SHOCKING ROBBERY ON TRAIN BY SEVEN YEAR OLD GIRL.” clearly visible.

Panel 4 (large)- Mr C has lowered his newspaper and looking in surprise at the cute little girl now pointing a big gun at him and her hand is out.

Page 4

Panel 1- Mr C has turned out his suit pockets and the girl is inspecting his outstretched hands with disbelief. Should only contain the key to appartment and small change and a sweet or two.

Panel 2- The Girl is popping the sweet into her mouth while the other hand is waving the gun at Mr. C who just looks resigned to his fate.

Panel 3- the Girl is sucking on the sweet while eyeing the sad Mr. C. She’s looking thoughtful, calculative.

Panel 4- The Girl is now talking animatedly to Mr C (the gun is still being waved about rather cavalierly) who now looks interested.

Panel 5- The Girl is walking away, putting the gun in her clutch bag. with Mr C behind her, he’s carrying a large travel bag, the zip should be slightly open and some dollar bills should be peeking out.

Page 5

Panel 1- Mr. C (in suit and tall hat), he’s looking happy, eating his breakfast at the tiny dining table. The morning newspaper is on the side, unopened.

Panel 2- Close-up of the newspaper. Headlines in bold should read: “Robber girl Still Terrorising Subway.”

Panel 3 (large)- The Girl is now pointing her gun at a rich corporate type sitting on the subway, he’s emptying his pocket contents into the travel bag held open by Mr. Cuddly.

- FIN-

2005-09-07T22:20:00.000-07:00

Made some more revisions after Loston's input-thanks loston!

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TITLE- When you lose sight of what’s right.

Page 1

Panel 1- Night time in a dingy, graffitti covered area in the city. Beside a phonebooth with broken glass panels, two shady guys are exchanging a small parcel under a dim street light.

CAPTION- WHEN YOU START WONDERING WHY YOU DO THIS EVERY DAY..

Panel 2- Closer look at the two guys. One is dark, disheveled, unshaven, eyes nervously darting here and there. Lean and fit but his arms have needle marks peppered on them, longish hair flopping about his face. The other guy is an obvious dealer, diamond earrings, tattoo, handing over the package to the junkie.

DEALER- YOU KNOW THE DEAL… YOU’LL GET YOUR FIX ONCE YOU DELIVER THE GOODS..

JUNKIE- YEAH.. YEAH…

Panel 3- The Junkie is now holding the package, the dealer is talking as if issuing instructions, hands gesticulating, heavily ringed fingers. You can now see a gun at the dealer’s waist.

DEALER- NEXT DELIVERY’S THE HIGH SCHOOL..

JUNKIE- YEAH.. YEAH.. LINCOLN MEMORIAL HIGH..

SFX-BRRINGGG..

Panel 4- Dealer is just taking a phonecall, Junkie is glancing up at him (you should see some subtle changes in his appearance, less the nervous junkie, more authoritative), dealer hasn’t noticed, he’s turned slightly away.

DEALER- JUST GOT TO DEAL WITH THIS SKANK FIRST…

Panel 5- The dealer has turned around to face a gun barrel in his direction. The junkie is now calm, cool and steady as a rock..

JUNKIE- DEAL THIS…..

Page 2

Panel 1- All hell has broken loose. Cops everywhere, the dealer on the ground, handcuffed, sirens blaring, lights flashing. We see the junkie talking to a large set detective, the package in his hand, now in a plastic evidence bag.

DETECTIVE #1- HE ALMOST CAUGHT YA OUT THIS TIME…

JUNKIE- ALMOST… BUT NOT QUITE..

Panel 2- the Junkie is in a gym locker/shower thing, around him are cops in various clothes, some changing into uniforms, some into street clothes. The Junkie is wiping the needle marks off with a wet wipe. He looks disillusioned, tired.

CAPTION- WHEN YOU START TO WONDER ‘IS IT WORTH IT?’

Panel 3 (large)- Split into three smaller panels. Same scene to Panel 5 (pg1) but different dealers each time.

CAPTION- WHEN THEY ALL START TO LOOK THE SAME….

Page 3

Panel 1- the Junkie/cop is now writing report on a computer, his desk has got files piled up on one side, around him other cops at similar work.

CAPTION- AND YOU WONDER WHETHER YOU ARE REALLY DOING ANYTHING TO STOP THIS CRAP…

Panel 2- The junkie/cop interrogating dealer (from Page 1) in an interrogation room, plain table/chairs, glass on one side. Dealer looks unrepentant, uncaring. Junkie/cop looks angry and waving hands about. Next to the dealer is a lawyer, skanky type.

CAPTION- JUST WHEN YOU THINK IT’S A LOSING BATTLE…

Panel 3 (small)- The junkie/cop is opening a front door with his key, he looks really wound up, tired, stressed.

CAPTION- YOU COME HOME…

Page 4

Panel 1 (Splash page)- Perhaps a birdseye view. The junkie/cop is now wreathed in smiles, arms open, although his eyes look tired/stressed. He’s been enthusiastically greeted by wife (plump, short hair, brunette, asian) holding a young baby (6mths old, boy, chubby) and two kids (boys, around 3-4 year old and 8 year old), the joy on their faces to see him (kids should resemble junkie/cop in some ways). Nice living room/dining room (food on the dining table).

CAPTION- THEN YOU REMEMBER WHO THE BATTLE IS FOR…
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3 Pager- When you lose sight of what is right.

2005-09-01T07:54:00.000-07:00

This is something that hit me last night so I decided to give it a go. I thought I'd try and do it in a 3 pager, since it was more an idea floating around, rather than a concrete character etc.

enjoy! (also posted on PJ).

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TITLE- When you lose sight of what’s right.

Page 1

Panel 1- Night in a city. Dimly lit by streetlights, quite a rundown urban area. Graffitti on walls. Two scruffy guys are on the corner, below one of the lights, near them a phone booth, broken glass in one of the panels. The two guys are close together and it looks like a parcel (small) is changing hands. Has to look clandestine.

DEALER- YA KNOW DA DEAL…

JUNKIE- YEAH.. YEAH…

Panel 3- The Junkie is now holding the package, the dealer is talking as if issuing instructions, hands gesticulating, heavily ringed fingers. You can now see a gun at the dealer’s waist.

DEALER- NEXT DELIVERY SHOULD BE 54^TH STREET HIGH SCHOOL..

JUNKER- YEAH.. YEAH.. 54^TH STREET..

DEALER- YEAH.. YEAH.. I HEAR YA.. JUST GONNA DEAL DIS SKANK FIRST…

JUNKIE (WHISPER)- WE ARE GOOD TO GO…

Panel 5- The dealer has turned around to face a gun barrel in his direction. The junkie is now calm, cool and steady as a rock..

JUNKIE- DEAL THIS…..

DET #1- HE ALMOST CAUGHT YA OUT THIS TIME…

JUNKIE- ALMOST… BUT NOT QUITE..

CAPTION- WHEN YOU START TO WONDER ‘IS IT WORTH IT?’

Panel 3 (large)- Split into three smaller panels. Same scene to Panel 1 but different dealers each time.

CAPTION- AND YOU WONDER WHETHER YOU ARE REALLY DOING ANYTHING TO STOP THIS CRAP…

CAPTION- JUST WHEN YOU THINK IT’S A LOSING BATTLE…

Panel 3 (small)- The junkie/cop is opening a front door with his key, he looks really wound up, tired, stressed.

CAPTION- YOU COME HOME…

Panel 4 (large)- The junkie/cop is now wreathed in smiles, arms open, although his eyes look tired/stressed. He’s been enthusiastically greeted by wife (plump, short hair, brunette, asian) holding a young baby (6mths old, boy, chubby) and two kids (boys, around 3-4 year old and 8 year old), the joy on their faces to see him (kids should resemble junkie/cop in some ways). Nice living room/dining room (food on the dining table).

CAPTION- THEN YOU REMEMBER WHO THE BATTLE IS FOR…

for the PaleMan. user on PJ.

2005-08-25T22:59:00.000-07:00

Page 1

Panel 1- Apartment block windows, it’s middle of the night, dim lights. Lots of shadows, half light. Looks like any other cityscape.

Panel 2- Next shot of inside an apartment,living room with books strewn here and there, exercise equipment in one corner, tv in another, pictures on wall. Looks homey. Somewhere in the shot, there could be Paleman’s outfit and weaponry adorning one wall, has to look out of place amongst the homey look.

Panel 3- Switch to the bedroom, big bed in centre of room, a female figure curled up fast asleep in the bed, long hair flowing, she looks peaceful, happy. Next to her Paleman is fitfully sleeping, his face tense frowning, beads of sweat, like he’s having a bad dream.

Panel 4- Close of Paleman’s face, startled, frightened, eyes wide open, sweat pouring off him. (he’s sat up in bed now, startled).

Panel 5- Paleman is now sitting up on side of the bed, head in hand, shoulders hunched as if under a terrible burden.

Page 2

Panel 1- Paleman standing by the window, a breeze blowing, curtains are moving, he’s staring outside, pensive, tense. Behind him, his girlfriend sleeps peacefully.

Panel 2- Flash back sequence. Paleman (he looks tired and bored) is standing over a body, pretty gruesome kill. Next to him, a short, fat man (think similar to the clown in Spawn? But w.o the makeup) in a badly fitting suit who has a clipboard and marking off something off a list. He looks satisfied.

Panel 3- Returns to Paleman in apartment, he’s now pacing the living room, a drink in his hand, he looks agitated.

Panel 4-Flashback sequence. Paleman sitting on a bench watching his girlfriend taking pot shots at a target in a field somewhere, she’s shooting energy beams. He looks thoughtful as if pondering what’s in the future. (like the thinker’s pose)

Panel 5- another flashback sequence where Paleman and the fat guy are in an office (think dusty, messy), fat guy is handing Paleman an envelope filled with cash (have some notes sticking out or Paleman perhaps checking the contents?)

Page 3

Panel 1- Same office. Fat guy is now pointing to a picture of girlfriend and the energy bolts scene, he’s talking with a smirk on his face. Paleman looks furious and shaking his head as if to say no to whatever fat guy is saying.

Panel 2- Flashback again, later in day: Back at the apartment, Paleman is having a nice romantic dinner with girlfriend, shes looking lovingly at him, happy and secure. He’s trying his best but he’s clearly distracted.

Panel 3- Present day. Paleman is dressed in his gear, slipping on tracksuit jacket and pants? He looks really wound up still.

Panel 4- Paleman, all hunched up, hands in pockets, walking along the street, as if trying to outwalk his problems. (would it be possible to have an inset panel to show somehow the fat guy pointing to that picture? As if to show it’s preying on his mind?)

Panel 5- Darkened park, Paleman sitting on the park bench staring out, thinking. Behind him in a corner, you see some youths (scruffy, potential mugger look) eyeing him up..

Panel 6- the youths (5?) have approached Paleman and one of them (the ringleader) has hand out and angrily pointing a knife at him, Paleman just looks annoyed.

Page 4

Panel 1- Paleman is now in the midst of breaking ringleader’s arm, think a speedy leap off park bench, taking arm with him, bending it back. An sound effect be good here. Knife is falling to the ground.

Panel 2- Ringleader now on ground in agony. Two more youths have leapt forward, Paleman is doing a spinning kick to one head.

Panel 3- Youth #2 has teeth kicked out, lying crumpled on ground, Youth #3 is in a headlock and Youth #4 behind Paleman rushing forward and Paleman has a fist raising upwards to meet him (like from a bent elbow, fist upwards).

Panel 4- Paleman is throwing one of their knives at Youth#5 (a through the air shot).

Panel 5- Close up of Youth #5’s face, in total shock and disbelief. Knife in his throat.

Panel 6- Paleman is panting, hands clenched, around him on the ground, carnage, the youths are majorly beaten up. He looks fed up and angry.

Page 5

Panel 1- Paleman is getting away from the park, his clothes splattered in blood. Cellphone ringing (sfx or the rings) in his pocket?

Panel 2- Split panel. Fat Guy is in one panel (he looks like he’s driving). Paleman looks anger, teeth gritting.

Panel 3- Paleman back at the appmnt now, one hand shaking girlfriend awake, other hand pointing to suitcase on ground, as if to get her to pack. Clothes etc are strewn about the room now.

Panel 4- Paleman and girlfriend leaving the building through the back entrance into alleyway with some bags/suitcase/boxes?

Panel 5- paleman and girlfriend getting into an SUV or truck (parked in alleyway), they looked like they are in a hurry. She’s looking bewildered.

Panel 6- you see the SUV driving off in street below but above them, an explosion in one of the apmnt buildings, flames shooting out from windows.

Latest entry for PJ's writing contest IV

2005-08-25T04:16:00.000-07:00

TITLE: Lil Kitty comes out to play

Page 1

Panel 1- In a narrow alleyway, an alley cat is walking carefully across a wall ledge, on the wall below is graffiti sprayed all over it. It’s night time, with a dim street light the only real illumination. Below the cat, you can just make out trash cans, trash strewn everywhere.

CAPTION- IT WAS A DARK NIGHT.. NOT STORMY, THAT WOULD JUST BE A CLICHÉ NOW WOULDN’T IT?

Panel 2- A young girl is curled up in a door way gripping a large (thinking camping size), the cat is walking in front of her, trash cans on our right.. She’s about mid teens, long dark hair, dressed in jeans, sweatshirt. She’s actually well dressed but grubby now.. Her face is tear streaked..

CAPTION- I WAS DOING JUST FINE… TILLL ‘IT’ HAPPENED…

Panel 3- Flashback sequence daytime.. A nice suburban house, the same girl is coming down the steps, front door partially open, facing us, backpack on her back, tears streaming down her face. Her eyes are fearful but she has a stubborn angry look on her face (like just coming from an argument)..

ANGRY MAN’S VOICE (OP)- AND DON’T YOU COME BACK, YOU FREAK SHOW!!

WOMANS VOICE (OP)- NO, FELICIA, COME BACK! NO!

Panel 4- Small panel. Back to the alley, the girl is now stroking the alleycat, her eyes look just like a cat’s, green, almond shaped. Looks eerie in the dim light.

CAPTION- I DIDN’T MEAN FOR IT TO HAPPEN…

Panel 5- another flash back sequence. The girl is in a bedroom, sitting crosslegged on the floor, muttering over a large open book on her lap and a chalk circle drawn on the floor. The room is very pleasant, with fluttering opaque curtains billowing in wind. It’s definitely a young teen girl’s room in colour scheme wise.. but the posters on the wall arent of pop or movie stars. It’s cats everywhere..

FELICIA- FELINA OMINA MARGIOUS..

Panel 6- Small panel. The circle on the floor is glowing a blood red, a human shape is forming within the circle..

FELICIA- APPARIO..

Page 2

Panel 1- The circle now houses a shape of a tall man, with strange feline eyes and long nails, broad shouldered and handsome with a long ponytail. Very distinguished. Faint resemblence to Felicia.

MAN- FELICIA… YOU KNOW YOU AREN’T SUPPOSED TO CONTACT ME..

FELICIA- I NEED YOUR HELP… GET ME OUTTA HERE PLEASE…

Panel 2- The man is sad, looks at her with eyes full of regret and worry.

MAN- I AM NOT SUPPOSED TO.. FELICIA. YOU KNOW WHY..

FELICIA (OP)- BUT I CAN’T STAND IT ANYMORE..

Panel 3- Flashback sequence. A younger Felicia is in her room, night time, sleeping in her bed. A shadowy figure of a man is looming over her bed, you can just see him unbuckling his belt.

FELICIA- HE HURTS ME…

Panel 4- Back to present. Felicia is talking to the man who’s looking angry, fists clenched. She’s crying.

MAN- PACK WHAT YOU NEED, FELICIA. DON’T FORGET THE BOOK…

MAN- I WILL HANDLE THIS.

Panel 5- Small Panel. Felicia is frantically packing the backpack, you can see the big book sticking out inside already, the room is in a mess. In the background, you can see her bedroom starting to open. No sign of the circle or the man now.

Panel 6- Felicia’s turned around to leave, her backpack on her shoulders already. Strangely her room is now bare, as if no one had ever lived there. The door is open in front of her. A man and a woman are in the doorway. The man looks like a typical upper class type, well dressed but with cold unfriendly eyes. The woman looks similar to Felicia (her mum) who’s looking nervous and scared. The man is gripping Felicia’s mum’s arm.

MAN- AND WHERE DO YOU THINK YOU’RE GOING, YOUNG LADY!?

FELICIA- AWAY FROM YOU!

Page 3

Panel 1- Man is trying to block Felicia’s path. Her mother is knelt down crying, looking weak and powerless. Subtle changes to felicia, her nails are lengthening, eyes elongating and her mouth is turned up into a growl..

MAN- OH NO YOU DON’T… WHAT THE…

Panel 2- Felicia (she looks more like a Cat) in fighting position, her arm scratching the man’s face, he’s staggered back in shock. Her mother has covered her face in her hands, still kneeling on the ground.

FELICIA- DON’T TOUCH ME AGAIN, YA DIRTY BASTARD!

Panel 3- Felicia is fleeing down the stairs, the man attempting to give chase, his face bleeding from claw marks across his face. Behind them, the mother is walking as if in a daze. And from the room, a strange red human shaped shadow remains in the doorway of the bedroom.

VOICE (OP)- WELL, THAT WAS ONE WAY TO HANDLE IT…

Panel 4- Back to the alleyway now. Felicia is stroking the alleycat who has a happy look on its face. She is looking calmer and expectantly at the ground. You can just make out a circle of red appearing faintly on the ground.

FELICIA- I’VE BEEN WAITING HERE FOR YOU…

Panel 5- The Catlike man in the circle holds his hand out towards Felicia. She is about to step into the circle, a smile on her face.

FELICIA- …DADDY…

Fun exercise

2005-08-19T07:21:00.000-07:00

[url]http://www.penciljack.com/forum/showthread.php?p=630388#post630388[/url]

2005-08-03T20:33:00.000-07:00

Loston pix, the script is based on this.

2005-07-12T08:56:00.000-07:00

Here's the script:

Page 1

Panel 1 (large)- Split panel with upper half with a family, circa 18^th century. Mum is crying into a handkerchief, dad is looking sad but stoic , one sister early teens looking bewildered as she comforts her mum, and a young lad, about 17 standing up tall and eagerly talking. Lower half sees same young man now dressed in battle armour kissing his mother goodbye hurriedly, his sister (tearstreaked face) and dad standing next to mum.

CAPTION 1- THEY WEPT WHEN YOU TOLD THEM WHY YOU HAD TO GO

CAPTION 2 - THEY WEPT WHEN YOU KISSED THEM GOODBYE WITH NARY A GLANCE

Panel 2- The army marching by in shining armour as people watch them march. One end of a line you will see our young man looking eager and excited.

CAPTION1 - THEY WEPT AS THEY WAVED BY THE WAYSIDE

CAPTION 2- THEY WEPT WHEN YOU MARCHED GAILY OFF TO WAR.

Panel 3- The father is reading out loud to the mother who is knitting a long sock with tears running down her face. Sister is carefully placing a warm scarf into a box (prepared as a package).

CAPTION- THEY WEPT WHEN THEY READ YOUR LETTERS HOME SO FULL OF HOPE AND VITALITY.

Page 2

Panel 1- we see our young soldier still trudging along muddy paths with other soldiers shivering in the falling snow, his shining armour now discoloured

CAPTION- WHO WEEPS FOR YOU NOW, YOUNG SOLDIER LYING HERE ALONE IN THE COLD?

Panel 2- same soldier trying hard to polish his breastplate in falling rain- he looks cold, disillusioned and lost.

CAPTION- WHO WEEPS FOR YOU NOW, YOUNG SOLDIER AS YOUR ONCE SHINING ARMOUR RUSTS IN THE RAIN?

Panel 3- scene from a battle, bodies lie on the ground, our young soldier looking horrified at the carnage around him

CAPTION - WHO WEEPS FOR YOU NOW, YOUNG SOLDIER AS THE WARM FLESH ROTS SLOWLY FROM YOUR BONES?

Panel 4- our young soldier is holding the hand of a dying soldier who has a spear stuck in his ribs and an arrow here and there. Our soldier himself has a bandaged shoulder and is looking older, his eyes bleak.

CAPTION- WHO WEEPS FOR YOU NOW, YOUNG SOLDIER AS YOU LAY GASPING YOUR FINAL BREATH?

Panel 5- another battle scene, where the battle is raging. Our young soldier is crossing swords with another soldier in different armour, fighting for his life. Dead bodies on the ground. Sleet is coming down fast.

CAPTION - WHO WEEPS FOR YOU NOW, YOUNG SOLDIER AS THOSE AROUND YOU WERE DESTROYED IN A BLINK OF AN EYE?

Page 3

Panel 1- Army Generals with their shining armour reflecting warm firelight standing around a map laid out on a table, smiling and holding glasses of wine. You can see it’s a luxurious tent they are in with fur rugs on the ground, very comfortable.

CAPTION- NO ONE WILL WEEP IN THE ARMY TENTS

Panel 2- the generals are clinking their glasses together, looking relaxed.

CAPTION- AS THEY PLAY AT BEING GENERALS IN TIMES OF WAR

Panel 3- A harrassed looking man, sweating and bloodied is trying to sew together a nasty leg wound of a soldier who is screaming in pain.

CAPTION- NO ONE WILL WEEP IN THE HOSPITALS

Panel 4- overhead shot of rows of men lying on pallets on the ground, bandages seen on most, some are missing limbs, some are screaming as doctors attend to them.

CAPTION- AS THEY STRUGGLE WITH SO MANY VICTIMS OF WAR

Panel 5- a market town on a busy market day, vegetable, fruit stalls, normal day. People milling about.

CAPTION- NO ONE WILL WEEP IN THE ALLEYWAYS

Page 4

Panel 1- a Beggar in ragged clothing (military in cut) and a sword, missing an arm and next to him another beggar (similar ragged clothes) missing a leg, a helmet on the ground in front of them, it has a few coins thrown in.

CAPTION- WHERE THOSE ABANDONED BY THEIR MASTERS STRUGGLE TO SURVIVE

Panel 2- Wide angle shot of a huge mansion with well trimmed lawns and a flag flying on the roof.

CAPTION - NO ONE WILL WEEP IN THE CORRIDORS OF POWER

Panel 3- a group of well dressed men sit in circular rows of seats at the foot of a platform, listening to the speaker at a podium. They are wealthy, educated. The surroundings are rich and luxurious.

CAPTION- AS THEY MOVE ARMIES ACROSS THE MAP LIKE PAWNS IN A CHESS GAME

Panel 4- Same group of men now around a dining table, richly laden with food and wines, everyone’s eating and drinking and laughing. Richly furnished rooms.

CAPTION- SAFE IN THEIR MARBLED LUXURY.

Page 5

Panel 1 (medium)- In foreground, we see our young soldier falling to the ground, two to three arrows pierced through his chest, he’s aged a lot, haggard, an expression of horror and disbelief. Bodies of soldiers all around him in the background.

CAPTION 1 - NO ONE WILL WEEP FOR YOU NOW, YOUNG SOLDIER

CAPTION 2- GONE AND LONG FORGOTTEN….

Panel 2 (large) – a skeleton in heavy armour, head sunk down with strands on hair on its skull floating in the wind, his mouth open as if in shock. He’s sitting on the ground, half covered in snow, his sword and helmet beside him on other side, also buried in snow, barely visible. Behind him, are trees, birds flying, yet more snow.

CAPTION 1- ONE FIGURE IN THE CASULTIES OF WAR,

CAPTION 2- NO ONE WILL WEEP FOR YOU NOW.

2005-07-12T07:45:00.000-07:00

This is Loston Wallace's picture, stockpiled for use in the PJ writing contests. thanks loston. anyway the poem below was based on this pix, I will be writing the script accompanying this shortly.

2005-07-12T06:55:00.000-07:00

poem as part of a PJ writing exercise, might post the script later:

They wept when you told them why you had to go

They wept as you kissed them goodbye with nary a glance

They wept as they waved by the wayside

They wept when you marched gaily off to war.

They wept when they read your letters home so full of hope and vitality.

Who weeps for you now, young soldier

Lying here alone in the cold?

Who weeps for you now, young soldier

as your once shining armour rusts in the rain?

Who weeps for you now, young soldier

as the warm flesh rots slowly from your bones?

Who weeps for you now, young soldier

As you lay gasping your final breath?

Who weeps for you now, young soldier?

As those around you were destroyed in a blink of an eye?

No one will weep in the army tents

As they play at being generals in times of war

No one will weep in the hospitals

As they struggle with so many victims of war

No one will weep in the alleyways

Where those abandoned by their masters struggle to survive

No one will weep in the corridors of power

As they move armies across the map like pawns in a chess game

Safe in their marbled luxury.

No one will weep for you now, young soldier

Gone and long forgotten,

One figure in the casulties of war

No one will weep for you now.

Writing Only haha

2005-07-12T00:36:00.000-07:00

This is just to reserve this section :)

planning to use this just for writing "stuff".

lia etc